Hiya Everyone

Hiya, I'm new, I'm warriors~cs~kj from WI. I really would like to know how to write good songs, right now I've only got this one:

When I'm Around You

When I'm around you
I'm the happiest person I can be
But when it was time to leave
I just couldn't go
Even though I had to
Now without you I'm lost
Your the one that lights up my life
That I will always love

Your the shining star of my sky
Your the words to my book
Your the thoughts to my mind
Your the one thats taken over my heart

When I'm around you
I never get sad
Now I'm here and always longing for you
When I'm talking to you
It's not the same
oooohh, its not

Your the shining star of my sky
Your the words to my book
Your the thoughts to my mind
You the one thats taken over my heart

I could never stop thinking about you
I just could never seem to get you out of my mind
Now that I won't see you until next year
I can't stop thinking about you

Your the shining star of my sky
Your the words to my book
Your my thoughts to my mind
Your the one that's taken over my heart

ooooohh yea
Your the one that's taken over my heart

The "Your" is spelled wrong. The "You're" you should use is a contraction for "you are".

Good song! Hey warriors! Welcome to the site!